tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4394229508004811632.post3531004818709547660..comments2024-01-22T12:12:17.447-07:00Comments on The Book Doctor: Picture Book text up for critiqueThe Book Doctorhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04630790153730670666noreply@blogger.comBlogger9125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4394229508004811632.post-52618095041371014672021-12-14T21:45:02.379-07:002021-12-14T21:45:02.379-07:00Thank yyou for sharing thisThank yyou for sharing thisGileshttps://www.gilesburt.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4394229508004811632.post-54599462516942783602009-11-17T19:41:37.268-07:002009-11-17T19:41:37.268-07:00Thanks for dropping by, Crystal Mary. With lots of...Thanks for dropping by, Crystal Mary. With lots of practice, you can write something like this. Only difference is, it will be in your own voice and your own unique story. :-) Keep at it!The Book Doctorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04630790153730670666noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4394229508004811632.post-86675178671124151072009-11-17T14:51:09.519-07:002009-11-17T14:51:09.519-07:00Gosh, I wish I could write like this. It just does...Gosh, I wish I could write like this. It just doesn't seem to get out of my head and onto the paper the same. Well done!Sr Crystal Mary Lindseyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03509227559164880311noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4394229508004811632.post-66820389204147604722009-10-29T04:29:40.780-06:002009-10-29T04:29:40.780-06:00Thank you all for such nice comments, and with all...Thank you all for such nice comments, and with all credit to Sandi for being kind enough to post my story. There are ten in total about Rhys and the Sandelves he finds in the world below the rock pools. I would like them to be illustrated, however they are really reading books aimed at the 6-10 year age group.Anita Davisonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13068890701803582595noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4394229508004811632.post-77567441126115529392009-10-28T18:21:42.753-06:002009-10-28T18:21:42.753-06:00I don't know anything about picture book rules...I don't know anything about picture book rules. I understand the point of leaving the descriptions to the illustrator but . . . this feels like something that would be a beautiful book to read to a child when they are younger. Then, later they would enjoy the beauty of the words themselves. The description is wonderful. I think it would make a child fall in love with prose. Or maybe I just think that because I also did/still do.<br /><br />thanks Anita for sharing it.Debra E. Marvinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17853387871623424853noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4394229508004811632.post-82188948531471789242009-10-28T10:53:52.787-06:002009-10-28T10:53:52.787-06:00Hi Anita,I love your writing. I write picture book...Hi Anita,I love your writing. I write picture books too and it is hard for me to leave out all the descriptions, but for a picture book you need to leave that for the illustrator.<br />The descriptive sections should be left out, along with the section about his father being in the hospital, it doesn't seem to have anything to do with the story. You need to add to the plot, have a conflict or obstacle for him to overcome and show what he does to overcome it. I think it is a nice story and very illustratable. You just need to tighten it and add to the plot.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4394229508004811632.post-22037472724829740952009-10-28T06:17:13.952-06:002009-10-28T06:17:13.952-06:00Hi, Anita! I'm not a normal CP and not familia...Hi, Anita! I'm not a normal CP and not familiar with what's expected of British picture books, but I do know what's expected of American pbs. There are 36 pages (yes, there are exceptions of shorter and longer books, but they cost more to produce and are unlikely to be picked up because of it.)and all descriptions are told by the artwork. Also, American publishers don't want to see too many illustrator's notes from the author because our illustrators want to have a say in what they draw. All of that means your lovely descriptions would move your book out of the picture book world, which I think the age of your narrative and the length has already done. This seems more like a chapter book, to me. That said, I do NOT know squat about how the Brits do picture books, so keep that in mind! ;DVictoria Dixonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14012092208934951963noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4394229508004811632.post-61908669972742460692009-10-28T05:14:03.644-06:002009-10-28T05:14:03.644-06:00I'm already a fan of Anita's lovely writin...I'm already a fan of Anita's lovely writing.<br />This shows more of her vast talent.<br />Beautiful.Diane Scott Lewishttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05724042672923318289noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4394229508004811632.post-35696263060776700632009-10-27T23:14:57.994-06:002009-10-27T23:14:57.994-06:00Just like everything Anita writes, she moved me ri...Just like everything Anita writes, she moved me right into story and allowed me to experience the ocean, sand, and sun with Rhys. I'm a devoted fan, and with or without pictures, this is a lovely read.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09683064637626718318noreply@blogger.com